Essay
The technique aspect that stands out most from this essay is the voice employed by the writer. He is writing about childhood; a time when life is a game full of adventure and fantasy. His voice supports this because he speaks in choppy sentences and writes about the wonders of shadows on the wall and the magic sounds of street vendors outside. This mix of ideas along with the syntax is representative of the way a child sees the world and thinks about it.
However, the accidental spelling errors such as "cooky" for cookie, and poor use of grammatical punctuation do not add to the childish tone. Perhaps it would be cute if it were used obviously throughout the whole essay, but since it isn't, we have to conclude that it was just poor writing that detracts from the message.
As an AP essay, this reflective essay would not do very well. Although the lack of advanced technique is in-keeping with the childhood theme, it does not seem to be done purposefully. AP graders would not appreciate the young tone, even if it did correlate with theme. To describe the childhood events from a more mature and advanced point of view will take this reflective essay to the level of AP.
You have all the criteria needed to pass except that this isn't quite 400 to 500 pages. Fail
ReplyDeleteWait, 4-500 PAGES? I think you got something wrong there, Nikhita.
ReplyDeleteI give this a pass - you had a lot of interesting points which I think means you lent some serious thought to this, you also filled all the criteria I could find.
(That last one was from Reuben, just by the way...)
ReplyDeleteFail- Just add a title and an introduction. It looks good but also incomplete.
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